What’s Happening to My Teeth, part 2
I’m glad you came back to read the second part of What’s Happening to My Teeth. After you’re done, please share your thoughts and suggestions in comments. Constructive criticism is a learning tool, so fire away. My skin is thick and I can take those flying bullets. Now, enjoy part two…I hope! 😉
“Children, Daddy’s home.”
“Daddy!” They said, running to meet him at the door.
“Hello squirts,” he said, kissing Mama on the cheek. “What’s new with you kiddos today?”
“I have a wiggly tooth,” Emily said.
He bent over, “Let me see your wiggly tooth.”
She smiled big and wiggled it with her tongue.
“Wow, my little girl is growing up to be a big girl.”
“That’s what Mama said.”
Ann said, “I want to be a big girl, too.”
He smiled. “You’ll get your chance before long, Princess.”
“That’s what Mama told me,” Anna hung her head.
Daddy rubbed the top of his son’s head. “What about my little buddy, does he still have all of his teeth?”
Joshua took out his pacifier. He gave Daddy a big grin. He showed off all eight of his baby teeth. The family laughed.
“Dinner’s in ten minutes, kids. Go wash your hands.”
“Okay,” Emily said, leading the way to the bathroom.
At the family table, Daddy finished asking the grace. “Thank you for this food, we are about to receive. Amen!” He took a deep whiff. “Mmm, the chicken smells good.”
Mama smiled. “Emily, be careful to not swallow your wiggly tooth.”
“I will. Oooh, it hurts.”
Daddy said, “Try eating the chicken with your back teeth.”
She pulled a strip of chicken off the bone. “Daddy, what will happen when my tooth comes out?”
“Didn’t Mama tell you?”
She shook her head no.
He leaned forward. “Actually, a pretty neat thing happens.” This got all three of the children’s attention. “When your tooth comes out, you will place it under your pillow when you go to bed for the night.”
“Why?”
“For the Tooth Fairy. She will come while you are asleep to get your baby tooth.”
“Why?”
“To leave you money in place of your tooth.”
“Moneeeey, I get money for my baby tooth?”
Daddy shook his head yes.
“What will the Tooth Fairy do with my tooth?”
“It’s told the Tooth Fairy buries it as a sign the little boy or girl is growing up.”
“Like a big girl?”
“Yes, like a big girl.”
Anna said, “I want to be a big girl, too.”
What’s Happening To My Teeth is an early reader for ages 6-10. It will also be well suited for preschoolers with the vivid illustrations I envision complimenting the story. To read What’s Happening to My Teeth, part 1, click here.
Your critiquing is very valuable to me. So, critique away!
- Do you feel it’s offensive to children to call them squirts?
- Where do you see this story going?
- Some people (mostly agents & publishers) don’t like the mentioning of one’s faith in books, such as saying grace. What is your opinion? Are you more likely or less likely to buy a book with wholesome qualities which speaks of prayer or God?
Have a wonderful Wednesday!
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