What’s Happening to My Teeth, part 4

Howdy, y’all! It makes this East Tennessee girl awfully happy to see you back ready to read part four of What’s Happening To My Teeth.  The suggestions and kind words are not only encouraging but helpful. So, please keep it up. I need you!

 

Emily, Anna, and Joshua sat outside a few days later having a picnic lunch on the grass.  Suddenly, an idea popped into Emily’s head.  She remembered something. “Mama, may I have some taffy?”

She got up off the blanket,  “Sure…”  Mama motioned for the children to follow. “Anna and Joshua, would you like a piece of candy, too?”

“Goody, yeah,” Anna said.

They all went inside to the kitchen where Mama got the candy dish off the top of the refrigerator and sat it on the dining room table. “You may each have two pieces.”

Emily unwrapped a piece of cherry taffy, “I’m going to see if eating this will get my wiggly tooth out.” She popped it into her mouth.  Her jaws began moving up and down and up and down. “Unnn, it sure is awfully chewy.”

Anna and Joshua ate their candy, as they watched Emily chew and chew and chew until all her candy was gone.

“Did it work,” Anna asked.

“No,” she sighed with her finger still in her mouth. “it’s just stuck to my back teeth is all.”

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“Good morning, sleepy head,” Mama said.

Emily yawned, “Can you pull my wiggly tooth today?”

“We can try later,” she smiled. “but for now, eat your oatmeal while its hot with your sister and brother.”

As soon, as their children were through eating they carried their empty bowls into the kitchen. The girls helped Mama load the dishwasher while Joshua played with his matchbox cars.

Emily put the last glass into the dishwasher, “Can we play dentist now?”

“Okay.”

Anna asked, “Do you want Daddy’s pulling tool?”

“No thank-you. I don’t have an apron like my grandma, but this dish towel should work just as well.”

Emily sat in the dining table chair. “Will it hurt?”

“It may smart just a little, but nothing too bad.”

Bravely, she opened her mouth, while her sister and brother watched. Mama wrapped the thin dish towel snuggly around the tiny baby tooth.  She gave a firm, quick tug, and removed the dish towel.

They all peered inside the towel. “Where is it?” Anna asked.

“It’s still in my mouth.”

Everyone looked at Emily wiggling her tooth with her tongue.

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“Give it back,” shouted Anna.

Joshua begged, “Me want to play with baby.”

“Boys, don’t play with baby dolls.”

He screeched, “Baby hungry! Me feed, baby NOW!”

“Let go,” she demanded.

“‘C’mon Anna…he just a little feller,” Emily said, stepping between them. At that precise moment, Anna turned loose with Joshua still tugging hard on the doll.

With a hard whump, the doll hit Emily square in the mouth.

“Owwwch,” she cried.

Joshua looked innocently. Anna’s eyes got wide.

Mama came into the room, “What’s all the commotion?”

Anna swallowed hard, “Joshua hit Emily in the mouth with my baby doll…accidentally.”

“Your mouth is bleeding, Emily,” said Mama.  “Did he knock your tooth out?”

“Noooo,” she shook her head. “It’s still there.”

© 2011 Cathy Kennedy
All rights sole property of the author and is not to be reproduced without written permission.  Contact the author to get complete manuscript for publication consideration, please contact by email.

What’s Happening To My Teeth is an early reader for ages 6-10. This vividly illustrated book will be a good read-aloud story for younger children.

To read more of this story….
What’s Happening to My Teeth, part 1
What’s Happening to My Teeth, part 2
What’s Happening to My Teeth, part 3

Feel free to share your stories of your children’s experiences with losing their first baby teeth. I would love to read them! And, as always remember… your critiquing is a very valuable tool to me. So, critique away!

Have a wonderful Wednesday!


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11 comments

  1. RaeBeth McGee I love your feedback. Most definitely will give it all a one, two going over and even then it’ll need more work. I’ve been there, done that, you know? Monday, I’ll post the last segment of this story for your enjoyment and your youngin’. =D Thanks!

  2. My thoughts on this piece: I believe I may have seen some small typing errors. So, I would suggest doing one last look over of the entire story before trying to publish it. Also, I noticed in a previous post, the son had made a comment to the mother about the little girls in the bedroom with Daddy’s tool. The son sounded rather grown up compared to how he talks in this piece. Other than that, its great.

    My daughter enjoyed reading this with me. She said she can’t wait to have a tooth loose so she can sent one to the tooth fairy. Good luck with your writing and I can’t wait to read more.

  3. Hi Cathy.  Losing teeth is such a big deal for kids (and their parents)–a milestone and therefore a great subject for a picture book.  I assume you are in the process of getting it published.  Hope it’s a great success.

  4. Cedar Hill Thanks for following! I loved visiting your blog. Your front porch looks like such a welcome place to be.  Someday, I hope to have a lovely screened porch with a mountain view. Of course, I’d have to have some rocking chairs, too. =D

  5. @openid-92115:disqus It’ll be interesting to hear what your daughter thinks of my story. Add reactions and your thoughts this piece.  I have one post to wrap up this manuscript, then it’s off to find someone willing to publish it. That’s the real tricky part, eh? =D

  6. New follower to your blog. I’d love it if you hopped over to mine and had a look. (Maybe even a follow) I will be sharing this story with my daughter. I bet she’s going to enjoy it.

  7. @6f910dec8a7792dd565132a1e38220ad Oh please do share this with your boys. I would love to get their feedback. How old are your kiddos? I have another story, my agent is working on which needs some critiquing. Maybe y’all would like to help me out with that one. =D If so, send me your email address and I will forward my manuscript for you to read to your guys.

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